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  • Closed as Promoted - Cam (Chat) 23:49, 6 January 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Neil Hamilton Fairley edit

I would like to take this to FAC at some point and could use some feedback. Currently rated B by four projects, and was a DYK page on 10 June 2008 Hawkeye7 (talk) 20:05, 2 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

  • The lead could do with an expansion. The purpose of the lead is to give a brief summary of the information within the article, and for an article of this size it probably should be a good two, or possibly three, paragraphs.
  • Ndashes (–) are required between the date ranges in the article and the page ranges used in the citations.
 Done
  • Remain consistant in the wording of the world wars. Currently Second World War and World War II are used; either have one or the other. If the former is chosen, also change "World War I" to "First World War".
 Done
  • Linking the dates is no longer required and is informally discouraged, so consider delinking them.
 Done
  • Only capitalise ranks that are attached to a person's name as they are not proper nouns.
 Done
  • The spelling of despatches in Mention in Despatches differs in the article; both despatches and dispatches are used. As the former (despatches) is accepted as the correct varient, please correct the spellings.
 Done "dispatches" is plain wrong but the spell checker doesn't flag it for some reason.
  • The following sentence is unreferenced, and needs to be: "The LHQ Medical Research Unit researched quinine, sulfonamides, atebrin, chloroquine, plasmoquine, and paludrine."
  • Is the "Dates and age of rank" section really necessary/important? It doesn't seem to really add much to the article.
 Done removed
  • Most of what is contained in the "Honours and awards" section is unreferenced and needs to be. Also, most, if not all, the honours mentioned in the "Medals and prizes" section is not covered in the body of the article at all, and probably should be.
 Done references added.

Cheers, Abraham, B.S. (talk) 05:24, 3 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

  • Support The only issue not mentioned above that I saw was that in the Middle East section the Great War should be changed to the First World War to be consistent. Good luck with FA! – Joe Nutter 00:38, 13 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]
 Done Hawkeye7 (talk) 05:31, 13 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • Support - a very good article on a fascinating man whose work saved thousands of lives. Happy to support, although I have two points below that should be looked at. Well done.--Jackyd101 (talk) 09:47, 19 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • "St George Hospital, Mumbai" - Mumbai should only be used for time periods post 1996, for earlier periods use the name Bombay (Unless Mumbai was the official title of the hospital at the time).
 Done
  • There are a couple of short paragraphs that would be better integrated with the others around them, e.g. "For his services in the First World War . . .", "Fairley returned to Australia in 1927 . . ." and "For his services in the Middle East, . . .".
 Done
  • Support Some of the more pedantic FAC reviewers might take issue with the varying date formet in the refs, but apart from that I can't see any major issues with the article. It reads well, it is well-cited, well illustrated. Well done, regards. Woody (talk) 16:31, 30 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]
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