Wikipedia:WikiProject Military history/Assessment/Heinrich Prinz zu Sayn-Wittgenstein
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Heinrich Prinz zu Sayn-Wittgenstein edit
- Nominator(s): MisterBee1966 (talk)
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I am nominating this article for A-Class review because thanks to Auntieruth55 (talk · contribs) I believe the article may also qualify for A-Class. Please let me know what might be missing. Thanks MisterBee1966 (talk) 09:24, 16 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]
- No dabs, alt text present, links are good according to tools. Auntieruth55 (talk) 00:16, 20 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]
- Comments:
- the first sentence is a little clunky (the addition of "of aristocratic descent" before "during World War II" indicates that his aristocratic descent was during the war, not his status as a night fighter;
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- World War II is overlinked in the lead (in the first sentence and then last sentence of the first paragraph);
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- suggest wikilinking "cavalry" in the lead;
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- in the lead "night of 6 to 7 May" I believe should be "6/7 May" per Wikipedia:MOSDATE#Dates;
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- in the Personal life section, the word "numerous" appears twice in the same sentence, I suggest changing the second one to "various" for variety;
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- in the Military career section, second sentence I suggest deleting one mention of "1937" in this sentence: "...summer of 1937 and, in October 1937, he was..." (I suggest losing the second mention of the year to improve flow);
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- suggest wikilinking "officer" to Officer (armed forces) in the Military career section;
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- you appear to be using US English variation, however, some of your converts are using British English (e.g. in the Night fighter section "kilometres". You can set these to us US spelling, by adding "|sp=us" to the convert template;
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- in the Night fighter section, you capitalise the word "Bombers" in this sentence: " 6 four-engined Bombers". Should this be so?
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- in the same sentence you use the numeral "6", howevr, under the MOS I think it should be spelt in this situation;
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- please check your capitalisation of "front" in this sentence in the Death section: "...Eastern and 60 on the Western front..."' In other instances you use Western Front;
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- I think there is a word missing in this sentence in the Death section: "This encounter exactly matches time and area in which Sayn-Wittgenstein was killed." (I think you should add "the" in front of "time and area");
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- Citation # 23 needs a full stop for consistency (Hinchliffe 1998, pp. 238–239);
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- the date ranges in the titles in Bibliography and in citations need endashes per WP:DASH;
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- the article is in the category "Failed assasins of Hitler", but is the subject really a failed assassin. From what I can tell from the article (and I admit to having no other information on this) he thought about it and maybe even planned to do it, but did not actually attempt it. Surely to be a "failed" assassin, one must actually attempt it?
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- Additionally, as per above, can one really put him in the category of German resistance members? — AustralianRupert (talk) 11:03, 23 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]
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- Thanks for the feedback. I believe to have addressed every point MisterBee1966 (talk) 12:08, 23 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]
- Support: all my comments have been addressed. — AustralianRupert (talk) 12:21, 23 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]
- Made a small copyedit for grammar in the opening, didn't see any other issues. Support. - The Bushranger (talk) 22:48, 23 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]
Support'. I've watched this article grow up (so to speak). Although short, it appears to be comprehensive. Auntieruth55 (talk) 01:46, 24 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]
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