Wikipedia:WikiProject League of Copyeditors/Requests/Solar energy

Copyedited by Adacore (talk), a member of the Guild of Copy Editors, on 18:18, 13 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Proofread by Maralia (talk) – 23:30, 16 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]

All significant additions to the page should be complete. Some citations have yet to be added but sources are generally strong. Balancing out the content and improving the prose are my primary concerns with this request. A recent peer review identified several issues that have been addressed for the most part but other issues can certainly be brought up. The only content issue with the page is the lead picture. I hope this is ready for the League.Mrshaba (talk) 20:50, 9 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]

I've completed my copyedit, however I have a few comments (which I'll also copy to the article talk page):
  • The myriad of subarticles on solar cells and photovoltaics, especially with regards to spacecraft and satellites, is very confused and needs to be attacked by someone with a clear plan of how the subject should be broken down and structured. In editing the article I found Photovoltaics, Photovoltaic array, Solar cell, Photovoltaic module, Space solar power, Solar power satellite, Solar panels on spacecraft and a few other relevant articles, none of which contained all the information found in the Photovoltaics section of the Solar Energy article.
  • With the costs per kWh given for solar energy, some comparison to "traditional" power source unit costs might be useful for context.
  • The scope of this article is so broad I think it probably merits its own WP:WikiProject. Many of the sections could probably be ruthlessly trimmed, but only once pages suitable for the displaced information are available. This is already true in some cases (and I tried to move some information to subarticles where this was the case).Adacore (talk) 18:18, 13 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Oh my aching brain. This is an awfully big topic, isn't it? I'm thoroughly unqualified to comment on content or comprehensiveness, but I did proofread, and made some footnote formatting changes on the presumption that the article is aimed at reaching FAC eventually. Please let me know if anything I've done doesn't seem to make sense. Maralia (talk) 23:30, 16 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]