Wikipedia:WikiProject Law Enforcement/Peer review/Long Beach Police Department (New York)

Long Beach Police Department (New York) edit

I've significantly expanded this article and this was actually the reason why I joined Wikipedia in the first place. I'd like to get it to GA status eventually and would like to get a peer review of how it can be reviewed. I'd also like to see if this currently meets the project's B-Class standards. Thank you. --v/r Electric Catfish (talk) 19:22, 4 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Minor review by Riley Huntley edit

References edit

Ref [1]; This seems to be for the Nassau County Police Department, not the Long Beach Police Department (New York), I searched Long Beach Police Department and couldn't find anything. I think I am missing something :P. I also could not find anything about there being 2,550 police officers from that reference (which the ref is citing)

Fixed That ref was there from before I registered on Wikipedia, but I've removed it. --v/r Electric Catfish (talk) 20:53, 4 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Ref [2]; Ref 2 only cites that the police department has served since 1911 but not the fact there is approx. 78, both statements should be referenced.

The amount of officers is confirmed in their annual report, which is in Ref 5. --v/r Electric Catfish (talk) 20:53, 4 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Ref [3]; Same as ref 2, it would be best to be able to reference all, if not most facts.

Also on the annual report. --v/r Electric Catfish (talk) 20:53, 4 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Ref [4]; Webpage not found.

A subscription to LI Herald (which I have) is required to view it. I'll add a {{subscription required}} template to it. --v/r Electric Catfish (talk) 20:53, 4 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Ref 6 [5]; Ref 6 is the same as Ref 2.

Fixed It's a close paraphrasing from the website, so I have removed it and the citation.

Ref 9 [6]; Ref 9 is the same as Ref 3.
Ref 12 [7]; Ref 6 and 12 is the same as Ref 2.
Ref 13 [8]; Ref 13 is the same as ref 5.

Removed redundant citation --v/r Electric Catfish (talk) 20:53, 4 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Ref 14 [9]; Webpage not found.

Replaced citation with this. --v/r Electric Catfish (talk) 20:53, 4 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

As I have already told you the article needs more references, specially since there is now only 8 or so references that work.

Thank you so much for the review! Please tell me what else to fix. --v/r Electric Catfish (talk) 20:53, 4 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Sections edit

Sections needing more references;

History
Background

Other edit

"Specialized Units" section should be moved just above "See also". Add a sentence describing the section (i.e; "The following Specialized Units are serviced by the Long Beach Police Department" with a ref)

Done --v/r Electric Catfish (talk) 20:58, 4 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Lead: Make first two sentences into one paragraph and then add a separate sentence.

-- Cheers, Riley Huntley 20:18, 4 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Done --v/r Electric Catfish (talk) 20:58, 4 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks, Riley! --v/r Electric Catfish (talk) 20:58, 4 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]