Wikipedia:Peer review/Wusun/archive1

Wusun edit

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I've listed this article for peer review because i'm considering nominating it for GA and would like suggestions from other users on how it can be further improved.

Thanks, Krakkos (talk) 21:04, 3 June 2015 (UTC)[reply]

  • Just adding a few points for now. Some people apparently frown on decorative quotation marks per MOS:BLOCKQUOTE even if I rather like them (I'm not quite sure what the difference is between a pull quote and block quote), so use {{quote}} instead if someone wants it changed. There is still the issue with excessive number of cites after a sentence in the Language section, some ways need to be found to trim them. You can add a few in the lead. A couple of paragraphs that need sources would require fixing. I tried looking for them in Hanshu, saw parts of it, but it is not an easy book to read and I probably missed the rest. Hzh (talk) 20:45, 10 June 2015 (UTC)[reply]
    • @Hzh: I've reduced the overcitation in the relevant paragraph by preserving the top-notch sources and/or removing sources used elsewhere in the article. I've also changed quoting format to {{quote}}. If you could mention which paragraphs that require improved sources i'd be happy to try to remedy this issue. Krakkos (talk) 22:53, 12 June 2015 (UTC)[reply]
There is a citation needed tag in one paragraph and a dubious tag in another in the "The Wusun as Han allies" subsection, those would need to be fixed. The information is probably around somewhere in Hanshu (I saw a part of it in there), but it would still need to be checked against sources. Hzh (talk) 01:37, 13 June 2015 (UTC)[reply]
Also note that the Sino-Platonic Papers was written by Zhou Jixu, not Mair (Mair is the editor, but that doesn't necessarily mean he subscribes to Zhou's idea). I don't know if Zhou is well-established in the field, so I'm not sure if it would be wise to make him so prominent. Hzh (talk) 01:58, 13 June 2015 (UTC)[reply]
@Hzh: I added a citation to the unsourced paragrah by citing a source already used. The dubious tag was added by me, but i've removed that tag since i've (hopefully) verified the information through an appearantly reliable English-language source. I've also specified that Jixu is the only author of the above-mentioned paper, and trimmed down the undue references to his theories. Krakkos (talk) 12:07, 13 June 2015 (UTC)[reply]