Wikipedia:Peer review/William Borah/archive1

I've listed this article for peer review because… I'd like feedback prior to FAC. William Borah was a significant figure for the third of a century that he was a senator.

Thanks, Wehwalt (talk) 22:00, 1 July 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

  • I'm having a hard time following the lead as written. What does it mean to "bolt the party"? What is meant by "common war aims"? What is "failed of ratification"?
  • Per the recent RFC, religion shouldn't be in the infobox unless particularly significant to the subject
  • I feel that sometimes the prose is tending away from encyclopedic phrasing - for example, " where law and order was more the exception than the rule". Nikkimaria (talk) 03:42, 31 July 2016 (UTC)[reply]
OK, thanks, I will work on these.--Wehwalt (talk) 04:15, 31 July 2016 (UTC)[reply]