Westland Yeovil edit
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I've listed this article for peer review because I want to know how to improve it. Any comments are welcome, positive and negative.
Thanks, LouriePieterse (talk) 12:26, 20 June 2009 (UTC)
Ruhrfisch comments: While this is a good start, it needs a fair amount of work to be a fully developed article. Here are some suggestions for improvement - I also reviewed the Westland Interceptor article so some of the comments will be the same for both. This is a better article though.
- The lead does not adequately summarize the article per WP:LEAD. For example, the lead does not clearly identify the country of manufacture.
- The lead should be an accessible and inviting overview of the whole article. Nothing important should be in the lead only - since it is a summary, it should all be repeated in the body of the article itself. My rule of thumb is to include every header in the lead in some way and also make sure that important information from the infobox (like the fact that only three were built) are in the lead too.
- References are OK here, but the web page in Russian needs to identify the fact that it is in that language. Internet refs need URL, title, author if known, publisher and date accessed. {{cite web}} and other cite templates may be helpful. The journal cited could use {{cite journal}} to provide more complete information. See WP:CITE and WP:V
- Watch for unencylcopedic language - for example "One will notice" in One will notice that the wing section on each side of the centre section is different from the remainder of the wing, it is somewhat thicker
- The verb tenses are also odd and seem like they may be copyvios from the journal - why else would an aircraft that was built in the 1920s and does not exist be described in the present tense?
- The image File:WestlandYeovil 2.jpg does not have a license. I think this would qualify under WP:FAIR USE or perhaps the image would be free now since enough years have passed.
- I would look at some of the similar fighter articles to see ideas for expansion. The details of the specification could be given. Who designed it? What happened to the three versions produced?
- Per WP:See also most links which are already in the article should not be repeated in the See also section.
- A model article is good for ideas and examples to follow. There are many aircraft Featured Articles at Category:FA-Class aviation articles that seem like they may be good model articles.
Hope this helps. If my comments are useful, please consider peer reviewing an article, especially one at Wikipedia:Peer review/backlog (which is how I found this article). Yours, Ruhrfisch ><>°° 21:27, 26 June 2009 (UTC)