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Verity Lambert

I've done quite a bit of work on this recently, expanding and adding citations and references and so forth. It's probably too short and lacking illustration for a shot at featured article status at this time, but I'd like to get it to that level at some point so any advice and comments people have would be most welcome, particularly on areas you think could be expanded upon. Angmering 17:25, 15 September 2006 (UTC)

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• Per WP:CONTEXT and WP:MOSDATE, months and days of the week generally should not be linked. Years, decades, and centuries can be linked if they provide context for the article.
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You may wish to browse through User:AndyZ/Suggestions for further ideas. Thanks, BrianSmithson 12:57, 18 September 2006 (UTC)

Cheers for these notes. I have added the Persondata tagging; removed linked dates (aside from those in the references and the one for her date of birth); I have also gone through and tried to pick out unnecessary redundancies, where I can spot them. Angmering 20:29, 18 September 2006 (UTC)