Topkapı Palace edit
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I've listed this article for peer review because I would like to know how the current article is, how it reads, if it is too much or too little, if it should be broken down or in any way improved.
Thanks, Gryffindor 19:48, 2 September 2008 (UTC)
Ruhrfisch comments: Very briefly, here are some suggestions for improvement. If you want more comments, please ask here.
- The lead is way too long - should be no more than four paragraphs. Nothing important should be in the lead only - since it is a summary, it should all be repeated in the body of the article itself. My rule of thumb is to include every header in the lead in some way, but the article may need fewer sections / header too. Please see WP:LEAD
- Images should not sandwich text between them per WP:MOS#Images
- Per WP:MOSQUOTE do not put quotes in italics or use {{cquote}} or "curly quotes". Use {{blockquote}} instead.
- Article needs more references, for example the Site section is uncited (pun intended). My rule of thumb is that every quote, every statistic, every extraordinary claim and every paragraph needs a ref.
- Internet refs need URL, title, author if known, publisher and date accessed. {{cite web}} and other cite templates may be helpful. See WP:CITE and WP:V
- Avoid short (one or two sentence) sections (like "Courtyard of the Queen Mother") and paragraphs - combine these with others or perhaps expand them.
- Read WP:Summary style - could any of this article be split off and a shorter summary be left behind?
- As noted in a cleanup tag, this needs a copyedit to clean up the language and grammar. I would try and fix the other issues first.
Hope this helps. If my comments are useful, please consider peer reviewing an article, especially one at Wikipedia:Peer review/backlog (which is how I found this article). Yours, Ruhrfisch ><>°° 02:48, 10 September 2008 (UTC)