Wikipedia:Peer review/Tom Brady/archive1

Tom Brady edit

Why not; I know it needs some work, but let's see some feedback, please :) Deckiller 04:00, 4 February 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Hello again. :) Here are some comments after a quick glance at the article. You know where to contact me if you have any questions. :) Gflores ^Talk 07:53, 4 February 2006 (UTC)[reply]

mention more about injury (shoulder injury)
college years (struggle for position, was he any good, statistically?)
wikilink football terms (interceptions, field goal, etc) but no more than once, generally. i did a few.
quotes from tom brady, sportscasters
maybe a little pov in debate section. a quote here would be nice.
maybe a personal life section to incorporate stuff from the other information section (these types of bulleted lists are not liked in FAs). This could have his political views, religion, tv/commercials, etc. P.S. wasn't he like 50 most beautiful men or something like that?
move SI pic up near his 2005 season section

His collegiate career must be expanded, with each of hijs seasons as a starter getting the same kind of treatment as his Pro seasons... Also his private life is left out. There is the great story about how his three sisters were all highly sucessful and how that might have played on him, stuff like that needs to be included, otherwise this will be nothing more than a padded NFL.com stats page, Tom Brady is a man, not a football machine... no matter how much he might seem like one. Thethinredline 15:46, 5 February 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Okay, many thanks for the feedback. I'll try and get on it this week, although the new Star Wars WikiProject is really taking up time. Thanks again! Deckiller 13:49, 12 February 2006 (UTC)[reply]