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I've listed this article for peer review because the article has gone through several failed FA nominations in the past. However, it's also been recently revamped and it would be good to see it become FA. Any changes to be made to the article would be welcome, so that it can be improved before taking it to FAC.

Thanks, EclipseSSD (talk) 13:24, 15 April 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Just a small comment before a larger review later this week: The article still contains the problematic "audience consisting of pre-teens and adolescents" passage that was discussed on the talk page. Can we be sure, after this instance, that the other references really back the sentence(s) that precede it? —Erik (talk • contrib) 14:28, 15 April 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Maybe it'd be better to remove it.--EclipseSSD (talk) 14:29, 15 April 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Brief comment: This article is classified under "Everyday life" (!) Films etc are normally classified under Arts. I don't suppose it matters, but it seems a bit odd. Brianboulton (talk) 23:28, 18 April 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Oh yeah. Sorry about that. I couldn't remember where to put it, but oh well.--EclipseSSD (talk) 13:03, 19 April 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Nice article overall! I see a few problems with this group of sentences: "Initial critical reception of the film was mixed, receiving both praise and criticism regarding the atmosphere, story, characters, and graphic content,. It however was a strong commercial success, grossing $30.8 million at the United States box office. Despite this reception, The Texas Chainsaw Massacre has gained a reputation as one of the greatest and most influential horror films of all time". 1) The comma after "graphic content" at the end of the first sentence needs to be deleted. 2) The beginning of the third sentence is a bit confusing. Sentence 1 states that initial critical reception was mixed. Sentence 2 states that it was a commercial success. Sentence 3 states that "despite this reception, TCM has gained a reputation as one of the greatest...". If the film was a commercial success, how did the film go on to gain a great reputation "despite this reception"? Either the "despite this reception" needs to be reworded or the sentences need rearranging.--Pisceandreams (talk) 16:39, 22 April 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Also, the following sentence seems to be out of place: Christopher Null of Filmcritic.com said, "In our collective consciousness, Leatherface and his chainsaw have become as iconic as Freddy and his razors or Jason and his hockey mask.". This appears at the end of a paragraph that seems to include critical reaction to the film shortly after its release, and the fact that this is a review from a web site and that it mentions Freddy and Jason exposes it as critique made well after the film's release. I would suggest moving this sentence further in the "Reception" section, or perhaps even in the "Legacy" section. --Pisceandreams (talk) 03:21, 23 April 2009 (UTC)[reply]