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I will list this for FL when I return from a wikibreak but see no reason to leave an inactive peer review open. Rambo's Revenge (talk) 20:16, 17 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Hi I'm interested in getting this to featured list standard, but am keen not to use WP:FLC as a peer review, so would like some feedback first before I list it.

Many thanks, Rambo's Revenge (talk) 06:31, 8 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from Matthewedwards (talk · contribs)
  • "It continues to the stories about the characters living in Newport." -- Remove the "to"
  Done
  • Please don't pipelink Newport, as this will give extra context and understanding to the reader
  Done
  • Why the hyphens in "Ryan-and-Marissa and Seth-and-Summer"?
  Done
  • Use American English on US topics. "whilst" is British English and considered archaic in the US; "while" is more commonly used
  Done, thanks I didn't know that.
  • "documented the shows impact" -- possessive apostrophy needed
  Done
  • "under the title of The O.C.: The Complete Second Season" -- no need for "of"
  Done
  • "The second season is yet to be released on any iTunes Store." Why mention it, then?
  Done, yes sorry, good point it. That was rather WP:CRYSTALBALL of me as with the first season was recently released, it was there to remind me to include the second "when" it was released.
  • "The executive producers were creator" -- perhaps "series creator"?
  Done
  • "written out of the show" -- "the series" is more American
  Done
  • In the episode table, the black text is a bit hard to see against the dark blue. Could you either lighten the blue, or change the text to white?
  Done, went with white.
  • "tension fills the air in the Cohen family is desperate to convince Seth, who ran away at the beginning of the summer, to return home." huh?
  Done, yes huh indeed.
  Done
  • Is savetheoc.wordpress.com a fansite or official? If it's a fansite, it doesn't belong in the WP:EL.
  Done, happy to remove but can you clarify why it fails. It is a fansite but it includes detailed guest appearances which are not covered by WP:RS's.
I just see a lot of fansites get removed from ELs in other TV articles, including those that I work on. I assumed it was part of the guideline but I can't find it anywhere, and WP:MOSTV#External links doesn't disallow it either.. I guess I was wrong! :) Matthewedwards (talk • contribs • email) 01:14, 14 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Looks good. Shouldn't be too long before it appears at FLC, I think. Matthewedwards (talk • contribs • email) 00:27, 13 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks, once again, for your help in peer reviewing. Rambo's Revenge (talk) 22:50, 13 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]
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