Wikipedia:Peer review/Tennessee Volunteers football/archive1
Tennessee Volunteers football edit
Any helpful comments or suggestions would be greatly appreciated to improve this article to a GA level. Davis Lee 20:10, 26 February 2007 (UTC)
Review by Djrobgordon
- The Overview section is redundant. That's what the lead is for.
- The lead is too short for an article this long. According to WP:LEAD, it should be between two and three paragraphs, and I think that's about right. A few things you could put in the intro: how long the program has existed, number of national and conference championships, maybe a few NFL players from the program, a period of exceptional achievement, if there is one.
- Consider reordering the sections. Right now the focus of the first section is the mascot. It seems to me History should come before Traditions.
- Cut down on the headers. The article has some sections, such as Rocky Top, that are barely even paragraphs. Superfluous headers clog up the Table of Contents and needlessly fragment the article.
- Most of the charts and lists near the end are useful, but I'd delete past and present players. I have two reasons for this. First, editors tend to indiscriminately add their favorites to these lists so that they quickly run out of control. Second, it's redundant, considering Category:Tennessee Volunteers football players already exists.--Djrobgordon 09:02, 28 February 2007 (UTC)
These are mostly general issues. If you'd like, I could do a more thorough read and point out some spots where the writing is weak, sources are needed, or more information would be useful. Sometimes people enter Peer reviews and never follow through, so I don't like to put in the time unless I know someone's on the other end. This should keep you busy for a little bit, though. --Djrobgordon 09:02, 28 February 2007 (UTC)