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Tenebrae (film)

article is about a horror/slasher "giallo" film directed by horror legend dario argento. what could stop this article becoming featured? any and all comments welcome. is it missing anything? does it need expansion, if so in which areas? are there any major un-cited assertions? any problems with the writing? thanks. Zzzzz 12:33, 9 April 2006 (UTC)

My main overall criticism is that it just lacks detail. Although there are no hard rules about FA length, an article of fewer than 1500 words is almost certainly too short. This is especially the case here where about half the article is the plot summary. The plot section is also rather too long for my taste, and lacks sources (I don't see this a problem personally but others do). The Response section should be expanded; review scores, if such things can be found, are particularly useful. At a smaller level, one-paragraph sections are generally to be avoided. The writing is mostly good but occasionally a little clumsy, such as "a metal sculpture with sharp spikes that lands on, and gorily impales, the demented writer". Essentially this article is heading in the right direction for FA but has a good way to travel yet. (By the way, thanks for your comments on my own FA nomination - hopefully our interaction will benefit both articles!) Soo 17:06, 11 April 2006 (UTC)

First, thanks to Zzzzz for thinking the article is good enough at this point to be put up for peer review. And thanks to Soo for your kind words about my mostly good but occasionally clumsy writing. I appreciate your valuable criticisms. I'm not sure if I agree with you about the plot summary being too long: Argento is notorious for his often incomprehensible storylines and I tried my best to keep the narrative details as clear as possible without being too convoluted. However, if other editors agree it should be shortened I will try to condense it. I agree that the "Response" section should be expanded. Tim Lucas wrote two excellent but conflicting reviews of the film and both should probably be referenced (the snippet that appears is from the more negative of the two), and it would probably be a good idea to provide quotes from Maitland McDonagh's analytical Tenebrae chapter from her Argento book. Your comment about the one paragraph section is understood but in this case the actual title of the film is a bone of contention amongst fans and I thought it should be addressed in a subsection for easy reference. If someone can think of a better place in the article for this particular info it would be appreciated. Also, should the lead paragraph be expanded or is it fine as is? Hal Raglan 14:38, 12 April 2006 (UTC)

article is now much longer and more detailed. any other issues to prevent it becoming featured? Zzzzz 10:54, 18 April 2006 (UTC)