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Tasmanian whitebait edit

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I've listed this article for peer review because I have expanded it based on the available reference material from a stub and would seek guidance on where the article sits on the Wikipedia quality scale.

Thanks, Nick Thorne ^talk 13:43, 15 May 2018 (UTC)[reply]

@Nick Thorne: one of the things I did early on was try to park articles at GA or FA status, which is the closest thing we have to stable versions. I have buffed Pacific blue-eye and smooth toadfish to FA status. I took some liberties in tweaking the article but figured you'd get the idea...cheers, Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 03:33, 27 May 2018 (UTC)[reply]

It still needs a lead section. It also needs some notes on its classification. elaborate on harvest. Does it have predators? what does it eat? Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 03:35, 27 May 2018 (UTC)[reply]

@Nick Thorne: Hi! Here are just a few things that you could do which I think would improve the article:

Complete sentences are always better imo. I noticed a few incomplete sentences in the prose of the article, such as "A slender, spindle shaped scale-less fish that grows to a maximum length of 77 mm, commonly 65 mm."
You're missing a bit of punctuation here and there. For example, "Originally named Tasmanian whitebait the species was renamed Australian whitebait following the discovery of a population in southern Victoria on the Australian mainland in 1993" has a missing comma after "whitebait."
I think you could expand the lead a bit to comply with the length of the article more. Maybe include one sentence about the description and one more about its life cycle?
Per WP:REPCITE, there's not really any need to have the same citation 9 times in the same paragraph - it just looks cluttered. Per the link I provided, "If one source alone supports consecutive sentences in the same paragraph, one citation of it at the end of the final sentence is sufficient."
If you're able to find more information about its behavior, that would be great. I definitely think finding out and adding what it eats, as Casliber mentioned above, would be a good start.

I hope you find this information helpful, and good luck! :)--SkyGazer 512 ^{Oh no, what did I do this time?} 14:38, 6 July 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Actually, I just went ahead and completed that one sentence for you. =)--SkyGazer 512 ^{Oh no, what did I do this time?} 14:41, 6 July 2018 (UTC)[reply]