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Super Smash Bros. Melee edit

Hello, everyone. I'd like to see what you guys think about the article SSBM and what we can do to bring it to featured status. - Kookykman|(t)e 16:49, 16 June 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Unnecessary date links in this article can be detected and fixed quickly: simply copy the entire contents of User:Bobblewik/monobook.js to your own monobook. Then follow the instructions in your monobook to clear the cache (i.e. press Ctrl-Shift-R in Firefox, or Ctrl-F5 in IE) before it will work. This will give you a 'Dates' tab to press in edit mode.
In addition, the word 'megabit' starts with a lower case 'm'. Hope that helps. bobblewik 16:53, 16 June 2006 (UTC)[reply]
Well, megabit was easy enough to change. :P I think the date links should stay in the infobox, unless there's a policy against them. - Kookykman|(t)e 16:56, 16 June 2006 (UTC)[reply]
The monobook tool is clever enough to ignore full dates (such as those in the infobox). It only deals with partial or incorrectly formatted dates (such as the two links to solitary years in the article). Regards bobblewik 17:16, 16 June 2006 (UTC)[reply]
Some stuff I found:
  • "It builds on that game's broad appeal and involved multiplayer mode, adding new features" Two games were mentioned in the previous sentence. Is there a way to make it a little clearer which one we're now talking about?
  • "A very popular title, it is considered the definitive killer game for the GameCube and is the GameCube's best-selling title with sales of nearly 7 million units sold worldwide" Not sure how much of that claim we can make, given the reference.
  • "As was the case in the original Super Smash Bros., Super Smash Bros. Melee does not have a true story behind it and merely features a scenario in which many of the most famous characters from the different universes of Nintendo converge in one dimension to do battle with each other for unexplained reasons." Phrasing is awkward, try something like "SSBM, like SSB, doesn't have a coherent plot and simply pits famous Nintendo characters against each other in battle."
  • The gameplay session could use some more linking, especially for character names.
  • "Because of special techniques only the most avid of players can perform (such as the wavedash that can allow a standing character to rapidly move forward or backwards while performing any standing move), large tournaments with cash prizes are held to honor players' moves (for more on tournaments, see below)." This can probably be omitted
  • The entire "tournaments" section needs references.
  • The "reaction" section could be expanded a little more, but the citations are nice. When submitting video games for FA, it seems that a lot of reviewers want more global impact/context information.
Themillofkeytone 17:23, 16 June 2006 (UTC)[reply]
  • some more information/citations invovling the Hoaxes. --ZeWrestler Talk 19:22, 16 June 2006 (UTC)[reply]
  • The following suggestions were generated by a semi-automatic javascript program. They may or may not be accurate for the article in question (due to possible javascript errors/uniqueness of articles). If the following suggestions are completely incorrect about the article, please drop a note on my talk page.
  • Per WP:CONTEXT and WP:MOSDATE, months and days of the week generally should not be linked. Years, decades, and centuries can be linked if they provide context for the article.
  • Per WP:MOSNUM, there should be a non-breaking space - &nbsp; between a number and the unit of measurement. For example, instead of 18mm, use 18 mm, which when you are editing the page, should look like: 18&nbsp;mm.
  • Per WP:MOSNUM, please spell out source units of measurements in text; for example, "the Moon is 380,000 kilometres (240,000 mi) from Earth.
  • There are a few occurrences of weasel words in this article- please observe WP:AWT. Certain phrases should specify exactly who supports, considers, believes, etc., such a view. For example,
    • it has been speculated that it may be due to
    • is/are weasel words, and should be provided with proper citations.
  • As is done in WP:FOOTNOTE, for footnotes, the footnote should be located right after the punctuation mark, such that there is no space inbetween. For example, change blah blah [2]. to blah blah.[2]
  • Please reorder/rename the last few sections to follow guidelines at WP:GTL.
  • You may wish to browse through User:AndyZ/Suggestions (and the javascript checklist; see the last paragraph in the lead) for further ideas.
  • Thanks, Andy t 22:33, 16 June 2006 (UTC)[reply]
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