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I've listed this article for peer review because I'd really like to improve this article, yet I do not know how. It seems a decent size, and his home to a filled-out infobox, yet it is still rated as a Start-class article. I could also use what is decided here for future reference when creating other articles on schools and school districts (hopefully). I apologize if this is an inappropriate usage of peer review or is simply a difficult peer review session, as this is my first jab at it.

Thanks, Starstriker7(^{Say hi}_{or see my works}) 06:50, 15 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

There are two high school FAs that may be useful models for ideas and examples to follow: Stuyvesant High School and Plano Senior High School Ruhrfisch _><>°^° 03:19, 21 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Ruhrfisch comments: Very briefly, here are some suggestions for improvement. If you want more comments, please ask here.

The lead should be an accessible and inviting overview of the whole article. Nothing important should be in the lead only - since it is a summary, it should all be repeated in the body of the article itself My rule of thumb is to include every header in the lead in some way Please see WP:LEAD
Article needs more references, for example the History and Activities sections have no refs. My rule of thumb is that every quote, every statistic, every extraordinary claim and every paragraph needs a ref. Fix the citation needed tags.
Internet refs need URL, title, author if known, publisher and date accessed. {{cite web}} and other cite templates may be helpful. See WP:CITE and WP:V
Activities seems pretty crufty - needs cited to reliable sources. Also Adlai Stevenson was not a Minuteman (Revolutionary War soldier) yet it says Many other aspects of the school, such as its nickname (Patriots), the school magazine (Minuteman), and Newspaper(Statesmen) were also named after characteristics of Adlai E. Stevenson.
What make the red link alumni and no link teachers notable? See WP:NN - my rule of them is to write an article on them first, then add them to the list.
Needs a copyedit
Any chance for more photos?

Hope this helps. If my comments are useful, please consider peer reviewing an article, especially one at Wikipedia:Peer review/backlog (which is how I found this article). Yours, Ruhrfisch _><>°^° 01:25, 23 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]