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I've listed this article for peer review because despite the work done on the subject it remains listed at a "start class". This parish is unique in many ways: the smallest geographical parish in Melbourne (if not Australia), its history from the closed St John's Theological College, its survival despite cultural changes in the area, particularly since World War 2. I really want this article to be a good resource, and welcome comments.

Thanks, Adamm (talk • contribs) 00:00, 10 October 2014 (UTC)[reply]

A few notes from Peripitus. I can't find any significant material missing. It needs more inline referencing and copyediting.

There a quite a few unreferenced paragraphs. From the context I assume that they are sourced from articles in the references section, but they do need inline references to back up factual statements.
A few common word structures to avoid: "also" is almost always redundant as is "A number of"; "recent" or "currently" should be replaced with a reference to the time in question.
The lead and history section seem to allow readers to be confused about the division between the the parish founded in 1914 and the physical church in 1915. Perhaps something like "St James the Great is an Anglican parish and associated church in the City of Glen Eira, Victoria, Australia." Then some edits to make it clear which bit refers to which entity.
Has the church been consecrated ? Did this happen in June 1915 or was that just the date of the first services in the new building.

- Peripitus (Talk) 08:49, 19 October 2014 (UTC)[reply]