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I've listed this article for peer review because that's what you do

Thanks, TheWarOfArt (talk) 20:13, 3 September 2014 (UTC) Done[reply]

This article needs an awful lot of work and isn't anywhere near 'Good Article' standard, I'm afraid.

The content is minimal:
- I'm sure a lot more happened in her 'Early life' than being born in Montclair, New Jersey? This section needs to be expanded.
- "Takal has worked on and starred in numerous independent films, some associated with the mumblecore movemement": maybe mentioning some of the films in which she was involved in the body of the article as well as the lead would be an idea? A brief description of the 'mumblecore movement' perhaps?
- You mention her first directing effort, but don't mention if there are any more or if this is the only such one to date.
Layout:
- Perhaps having 'Early life' as a subheading under 'Personal'?
- A filmography section would be useful, listing the projects she has been involved in as an actress and director. See Cate Blanchett#Filmography.
- If she has won any awards, an 'Awards' section could be included.
You should probably include an infobox, as per most other biography pages, see Sofia Coppola for an example. Sotakeit (talk) 14:59, 22 September 2014 (UTC)[reply]