Wikipedia:Peer review/Scottish independence/archive1

Scottish independence edit

This article has undergone a fairly extensive rewrite over the last couple weeks and I would like to see where other editors feel it now stands. I feel input from non-Scottish editors may be especially useful. I am aware of the outstanding citations required, any help with those would be great. Kanaye 21:24, 21 June 2007 (UTC)[reply]

This is a good article, well done. A hasty (by no means thorough) review...

I don't like the bracketed i.e. in the lede. Can you find a way of rewording this that avoids needing to explain yourself?
Scotland and it's populace --> its!
POV - The Anti-devolution view is, as you suspect, under-represented. As far as I understand the situation, both sides of the argument are equally keenly fought - hence they ought really receive a similar amount of coverage.
Perhaps put the 'location of Scotland' image earlier in the article. If I didn't know it, I'd want to know before that stage of the article...

Thanks for your input, I've revised the article accordingly. I've beefed up the anti-devolution viewpoint, although I wasn't sure whether you were specifically referring to the the devolution section or the article in general. Kanaye 15:55, 24 June 2007 (UTC)[reply]