Wikipedia:Peer review/Roxette/archive1

Roxette edit

This peer review discussion has been closed.
I've listed this article for peer review because I believe it is close to being a GA, though I'm sure it can be improved further, any comments welcome.

Thanks, Mattg82 (talk) 03:41, 4 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Comments by --Redtigerxyz Talk 18
45, 24 January 2012 (UTC)
I have removed one sample because I can see that it didn't add anything significant, possibly "Real Sugar" also. But I'm more confused about the others. Does "contextual significance" mean unless the article talks about the actual sounds and composition of the song, then the sample shouldn't be included in the article?
IMO "its omission would be detrimental to that understanding" of "contextual significance" is not fulfilled. 1 sample of a popular number to illustrate their style is OK. --Redtigerxyz Talk 18:23, 25 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • WP:OVERLINK:In "1988–1990: Look Sharp!" - "Listen to Your Heart", "Dressed for Success" are linked more than once. Also, MTV, EMI, UK are linked more than once.
  Done Mattg82 (talk) 00:46, 25 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Please go through the whole article and check other instances. Eg. "Neverending Love" linked twice in 3 consecutive sentences. Joyride, "It Must Have Been Love", Billboard, Gyllene Tider , Tourism, Canada etc. --Redtigerxyz Talk 18:23, 25 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • All statistics must be cited for a GA. Add references for (and the similar instances):
    • "in 1996, Marie Fredriksson released another solo"
Releasing an album is a statistic that needs to be cited? Mattg82 (talk) 00:46, 25 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Yes. The year of the release needs a reference. --Redtigerxyz Talk 18:23, 25 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
    • "The album Tourism also charted well outside of the USA, reaching No. 1 in Germany and Sweden, No. 2 in the UK as well as peaking at No. 5 in Australia." etc.
  • WP:UNDUE ?? :
    • "Four months later, Swedish newspaper Expressen reported Fredriksson had been diagnosed with a second tumor. This turned out to be false,[73] and Fredriksson later sued the newspaper for 500,000 kronor" --Redtigerxyz Talk 18:45, 24 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  Done I've made the sentence more neutral. It was a long protracted legal argument, I don't think a couple of sentences adds too much undue weight. Mattg82 (talk) 00:46, 25 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • Roxette is about the duo, but IMO throughout, the article digresses to reveal UNDUE details of solo albums of both of them.
  • Inconsistency (choose 1 spelling): United Kingdom/UK; United States/US/USA
  • Don't start a section with "It was around this time that...". Mention year

--Redtigerxyz Talk 18:23, 25 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Fixed most of your comments now. I've toned down their solo album details. As solo artists they have been very successful in Sweden so I'm not sure if I should remove solo albums completely. I fixed one of the "It was around this time that..." paragraphs but I still need to find the timeline for the "It Must of Been Love" paragraph. Mattg82 (talk) 03:43, 27 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]