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I've listed this article for peer review because I have been working on articles about the Oval Office desks for a few years now and this is the first one I believe I have brought to a Featured Article quality. I have gotten lists to Featured List statues before but never an article to Featured Article. I look forward to suggestions and comments on the articles quality in preparation of nominating this at FAC.

Thanks, Found5dollar (talk) 15:06, 29 April 2023 (UTC)[reply]

@Found5dollar: it has been over a month since this has been posted and there have not been any responses yet. Are you still interested in receiving comments? If so, I suggest posting a request for comments in the Wikiprojects attached to this article. Z1720 (talk) 01:59, 1 June 2023 (UTC)[reply]

@Z1720 Yes I am still interested in receiving comments. I will post comments on the relevant wikiprojects. Found5dollar (talk) 22:31, 9 June 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from Kavyansh edit

Will be more than happy to take a detailed look at the article soon. – Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 06:01, 11 June 2023 (UTC)[reply]

@Kavyansh.Singh, Oh wonderful. please let me know if you need anything from me before you start. Found5dollar (talk) 19:14, 17 June 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Since this is potentially going to be your first try at FAC, I will try to keep my review comprehensive enough and will try to take acre of all the criteria, or anything that you might face during the FAC. Most of the following comments would be merely suggestions, and you are more than free to ignore the ones you don't feel important.

"while searching for Sir John Franklin and" — We have 'Sir' here piped out of the link, but later in the "HMS Resolute" section, be have it piped inside the link. I am not aware what the standard practice is, what regardless, I must be consistent throughout. As a side note, do we really have to repeat "Sir John Franklin" seven times in the article? Wouldn't it be better to just state him as "Franklin"?
"Jackie Kennedy rediscovered the desk" — 'Jacqueline' would be more formal, I guuess. "Franklin Roosevelt requested the" — "Franklin D. Roosevelt", per WP:INITS
We have "Kennedy Presidential Library" linked twice in the lead itself. Look for other MOS:DUPLINK as well. This might help.
"However, the carving on" — I would really avoid using the word 'however' in a FA level prose.
Might wanna link "cause célèbre"
"Household Words" should be italicized.
Any reason why Edward Belcher and Henry Kellett are not referred to as "Sir"
"in Chatham, England in 1880"; "in Rochester, Kent and worked" — Missing MOS:GEOCOMMA
Consistency in "United Kingdom–United States relations" and "British–American relations"

More to come – Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 18:37, 18 June 2023 (UTC)[reply]

@Found5dollar: This has been open for over a month without comment. Have you addressed the above? Can this be closed? Z1720 (talk) 02:55, 2 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]