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Real Madrid C.F. edit
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I've listed this article for peer review because I want this article to be a featured one, not just a good one.
Thanks, Hadrianos1990 (talk) 10:17, 27 August 2008 (UTC)
Comments from Dabomb87 (talk · contribs):
- I'll review in more detail later, but the lead needs to be expanded. The lead should have at least one sentence summarizing each section (level 2 header).
- Section headers should not have inline citations in them.
- Some web references are missing accessdates.
- Prose isn't bad, but get a third-party copyedit anyway before FAC. Some examples:
- "In July 2000, Florentino Pérez was elected club president vowing to erase the club's debt and modernise the club's facilities, however the primary electoral promise that propelled Pérez to victory was the signing of Luís Figo." Wrong verb tense.
- "In the early 1990s, La Quinta del Buitre splited up after Martín Vázquez, Emilio Butragueño and Míchel left the club." Wrong verb tense and splitted is spelled wrong anyway.
- "The fee of €76 million (over US$100 million, £45.8 million) for Zinedine Zidane's transfer from Juventus to Real Madrid in 2001 is the highest ever paid in History of football." The link should be to the history of football article (which shouldn't be capitalized), and insert a "the" before history.
- "In January 2007, Real Madrid paid their debts of €224 million and fell to second spot behind Manchester United. However, they reached the top again in March by getting massive image rights of €762 million. Manchester United's debt was €872 million in 2007, down from €1.25 billion in 2005." Needs a source
- Image captions should have periods only if they are complete sentences.
- Consecutive inline citations should be in numerical order—"As a result, Real Madrid (with the addition of Fernando Morientes in 1997) finally ended its 32-year wait for the seventh European Cup in 1998 under manager Jupp Heynckes, defeating Juventus 1–0 in the final, thanks to a goal from Predrag Mijatović.[29][7]" Should be [7][29].