Radon edit
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I've listed this article for peer review because the article seems like FA quality and and it is time that I get some other opinions. Numerous notes which seem credible, the page deeply describes the hazards and its history, and the Applications paragraph seems well written.
Thanks, Wii Wiki (talk) 21:46, 6 September 2008 (UTC)
- Ha, I worked on this article a few months ago and did not continue submitting it because of the precautions section. It is overly lengthy and somewhat repetitious. Otherwise, the compounds section needs beefing up (I've left references on Rn compunds on the talkpage). Feel free to use those refs and then to copyedit the precautions section and it should look good for FAC. Nergaal (talk) 03:33, 14 September 2008 (UTC)
Ruhrfisch comments: Here are some suggestions for improvement. If you want more comments, please ask here. I think this needs some work before it is ready fopr FAC.
- Any chance for more images? Perhaps photos of a radon test kit or a radon mitigation ventilation system?
- Per WP:LEAD I think the lead should probably be three paragraphs (only two now). The lead should be an accessible and inviting overview of the whole article and nothing important should be in the lead only - since it is a summary, it should all be repeated in the body of the article itself - but The ratio of Radon molecules to Air molecules is 1:1021. is only in the lead. My rule of thumb is to include every header in the lead in some way.
- Watch numbers - spell out sixth in Radon is the second most frequent cause of lung cancer, after cigarette smoking, and radon-induced lung cancer is thought to be the 6th leading cause of cancer death overall. Generally spell out numbers under ten. Also make sure WP:NBSP is followed
- Can more details be given on how it was actually discovered? Currently it only says Discovered in 1898 by Friedrich Ernst Dorn, radon was the third radioactive element to be discovered, after radium and polonium.[3][4][5] then goes to 1900, then back to 1899 - could the order be more chronological?
- I would make clearer early on that the three radioactive gases are actually all isotopes of radon
- Watch needless repetition ... as a result there are very few reported compounds of radon, all either fluorides or oxides. Radon can be oxidized by a few powerful oxidizing agents such as F2, thus forming radon fluoride.[33][34] Radon oxides are among the few other reported compounds of radon.[35]
- A few places need a ref - paragraph that starts Radon, along with the noble gases krypton and xenon, is also produced during the operation of nuclear power plants. has none, and the stats and recommendation here The EPA estimates that nationally, 8% to 12% of all houses are above their maximum "safe levels" (four picocuries per liter – the equivalent to roughly 200 chest x-rays). The United States Surgeon General and the EPA both recommend that all homes be tested for radon. plus other places. My rule of thumb is that every quote, every statistic, every extraordinary claim and every paragraph needs a ref.
Hope this helps. If my comments are useful, please consider peer reviewing an article, especially one at Wikipedia:Peer review/backlog (which is how I found this article). Yours, Ruhrfisch ><>°° 08:05, 16 September 2008 (UTC)