PennPraxis edit
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I've listed this article for peer review because… I would like honest feedback, since the topic is still new, but there has been coverage of the group for a while now. The group is just now beginning to influence Philadelphia city planning.
Thanks, - CobaltBlueTony™ talk 19:03, 30 July 2008 (UTC)
Ruhrfisch comments: Here are some suggestions for improvement. If you want more comments, please ask here.
- Article is very short and needs to be expanded - what is the history of this, what are some other projects they have been involved in, how many people are involved? Peer review is typically for more developed articles, but always glad to help improve articles.
- Per WP:CITE references come AFTER punctuation, and are usually at the end of a sentence or phrase. If the words in quotes are direct quotes, they need refs too.
- Any chance of a free image - the building this is in? The professor in charge? A project they worked on?
- Language needs to be cleaned up in places - overuse of quotes around words, PennPraxis is an it not a they so change They offer opportunities for Penn faculty and students to test ideas and theories ... to It offers ...
Hope this helps. If my comments are useful, please consider peer reviewing an article, especially one at Wikipedia:Peer review/backlog (which is how I found this article). Yours, Ruhrfisch ><>°° 20:14, 5 August 2008 (UTC)