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Pauleta edit

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I've listed this article for peer review because i think that this is a good articule.


Thanks, Sdrtirs (talk) 16:41, 2 April 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Ruhrfisch comments: While it is clear that there has been a lot of work done on this article, if you want this article to someday be a good article, it will need a lot more work to reach the Good Article criteria. Here are some suggestions for improvement:

  • The article has ONE reference currently - to reach GA, it will need refs for every quote, every statistic, every attributed statement, and at least one ref per paragraph. See WP:V and WP:CITE Example where a ref is needed: "Pauleta is a fighter, very strong and completely unpredictable," said his former coach at Paris Saint-Germain FC, Vahid Halihodzic.
  • The lead should summarize the whole article per WP:LEAD and needs to be longer too.
  • Neutral point of view is a problem here, also see WP:PEACOCK. Just some examples - The striker's killer instinct is married to a deft touch with either foot, impressive aerial ability and excellent mobility. or this enjoyed an impressive run with Girondins Bordeaux in his first season. At the very least these need citations, but they are not very encyclopedic in tone.
  • Make a redirect page for his full name, i.e. Pedro Miguel Carreiro Resendes, and any common variations of it besides Pauleta.
  • A model article is often useful as an example to follow for structure and flow of an article. Pelé is a GA and would seem to be a good model too.
  • My guess is if this were properly cited and had more neutral language it would be fairly close to GA.

Hope this helps, Ruhrfisch ><>°° 22:56, 5 April 2008 (UTC)[reply]