Wikipedia:Peer review/Out of Mind (Tove Lo song)/archive1


I've listed this article for peer review because i'd like to nominate it for the GA status, but i'm not sure if it's well written.

Thanks, Paparazzzi (talk) 09:20, 24 October 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from Calvin999
  • Infobox needs a 'yes' for the border parameter   Done
  • Artwork needs a description in the alt=   Done
  • I'd remove the music video link from the infobox too. No one really does that now, and you've included it in the external links anyway.   Done
  • featured on her debut → for her debut   Done
  • with the help of Reuterskiöld. → You just said he produced so we know he 'helped', as you put have it.   Done
  • after "Love Ballad" and the first release of "Habits (Stay High)". → Why have you written the lead single second?   Comment: "Love Ballad" and "Habits" were initially independent singles released by Lo. Later, she signed with Universal Music and released "Out of Mind" and "Habits", the latter under the title of "Habits (Stay High)"
  • Lead says Minimal pop, Infobox says Pop   Done
  • Musically, "Out of Mind" is a minimal pop song featuring synthesizers, guitars, bass and keys instrumentation and the lyrics speak of the singer's inability to completely forget an ex boyfriend. → Too much going on here. Stalk about the instrumentation/genre and the lyrics as two separate sentences.   Done
  • Because of its lyrical themes, the singer herself and other critics deemed it as the sequel to "Habits (Stay High)". → Its lyrical content was described as a sequel to "Habits (Stay High)" by Lo and music critics alike.   Done
  • was released on the artist's VEVO channel on → We don't need to know this   Done
  • runs from them. → runs away from them.   Done
  • "Out of Mind" is a minimal pop song written by Tove Lo alongside Alx Reuterskiöld and produced by The Struts with the help of Reuterskiöld.[3][4][5] → 3 says Pop, 4 says Alt-pop (I guess he means Alternative pop, whatever that means), and 5 is the album credits. Where did you get minimal from?   Comment: I got the "minimal" from the 3, "For the track itself, Tove Lo‘s epic chorus hits perfectly after the subtly minimalist beats and instrumentation of the verses". There are other sources like this and this describing the song as "minimal".
    • Is Minmal a genre though?  — Calvin999 17:50, 30 October 2015 (UTC)   Comment: I thought "minimal pop" was a genre, but after searching the web I found nothing, so I guess the references refer that "Out of Mind" is a pop song with minimal production.[reply]
  • Link Extended play here again, and put (EP) after it too (same for the lead)   Done
  • On an interview → In an interview (apply elsewhere too)   Done
  • The block quote shouldn't have quotation marks because it is already indented, showing it's a quote   Done
  • that in the song, → We know the lyrics are in the song.   Done
  • Try to avoid the inclusion of one line paragraphs as you do at the end of Reception   Done
  • As before, Music video quote shouldn't have quotation marks   Done
  • Charts table needs to have the Charts column shaded in grey like the Release history table does   Done
  • Reference titles shouldn't have any block capital words   Done
  • 31 has a red link?   Done

Hope these help. Ping me with any questions.  — Calvin999 17:31, 26 October 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you so much, Calvin999 :D. I left some comments above. --Paparazzzi (talk) 01:09, 30 October 2015 (UTC)[reply]

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Thank you so much :D. --Paparazzzi (talk) 03:08, 31 October 2015 (UTC)[reply]