Wikipedia:Peer review/New Jersey County Colleges/archive1

New Jersey County Colleges edit

This peer review discussion has been closed.
I've listed this article for peer review because I think it is almost ready for FL status and am looking for advice on any last areas I can fix.

Thanks, MBisanz talk 23:21, 9 April 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from Dabomb87 (talk · contribs)

  • "with the state of New Jersey." I think you mean "within"? In any case, "in" is simpler and gets the point across just as well. done
  • "As of 2009, there are 19 county colleges statewide, reflecting the fact that two of these colleges each serve students from two separate counties." Maybe I'm stupid, but how does the number of county colleges statewide affect the second statement? done
  • "makes recommendations as to the"-->makes recommendations on the done
  • "In 2003 the state further established the Community College Consortium for Workforce and Economic Development as a single point of contact for employers looking for skilled workers in New Jersey." There should probably be a comma after "2003" to ease readability. done
  • "male to female ratio"-->male-to-female ratio done
  • Check out my comments at Wikipedia:Peer review/List of State University of New York units/archive1—some apply here too.
  • I think the entire table should be centered. Dabomb87 (talk) 02:58, 14 April 2009 (UTC)[reply]