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I've listed this article for peer review because i feel it fully covers the topic and would like some input on how to improve the article so that it will be hopefully soon be ready to go up for GA review.
Thanks, Found5dollar (talk) 17:07, 12 December 2010 (UTC)
I did a bit of touchup, let me know how it looks. Maury Markowitz (talk) 00:22, 15 December 2010 (UTC)
Well, this is my first time doing a peer review, so let's see how I do :) This was really cool and fun to read. Andy Warhol is one of my favorite artists, so I can't believe I didn't here about this before!
- This quote: "...He claims the agency gave him the runaround and, Myers states, "They never said no, I just could not get them to say anything."[1] Instead of going through the official channels he was forced to take the back route..." reads rather awkwardly. The phrases "gave him the runaround" and "forced to take the back route" sound like slang, and I really don't understand what you mean by this. Perhaps reword it. Also, elaborate on what is meant by "taking the back route" and the process of smuggling onboard.
- I like the artwork section a lot. Is it possible to expand it by talking of the symbolism behind the pieces? These are some of the questions/comments I thought up while reading:
- What is the meaning behind Rauschenberg's single line?
- The geometric variation of Mickey Mouse is said to be a "popular motif" for the time. By whom? And what form of art is this?
- What's Myers' about? This one left me the most puzzled.
- Chamberlain and Novros' pieces both resemble circuitry. Is there any difference between them or reason why they are similar? If so, maybe use a different word rather than "circuitry" for both to avoid confusion.
- The lead states that "many other personal effects were smuggled onto the Apollo 12." Like what? And how would they be stored without damaging the craft?
- What artistic legacy behind the six artists (sorry to sound redundant) led them to do this? Or, how has this affected other works?
- Any public opinion about it? You said that the NY Times found out, but that's all.
--Silverskylines (talk) 21:45, 16 December 2010 (UTC)
- Thank you for your thoughts and input. all of them make sense. I'll be working on them when i find time.--Found5dollar (talk) 16:40, 30 December 2010 (UTC)