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Mika Häkkinen

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Known as an "taciturn" character, Mika Häkkinen enjoyed success when he secured the Formula One World Drivers' Championship twice and has also competed in touring car and sports car racing. I've listed this article for peer review because I would like to receive feedback on how this article could be improved as I want to get this article to GA status with the view of an possible featured article nomination.

Thanks, Z105space (Talk to me!) 22:17, 1 November 2014 (UTC)

Comments from Bogger

First half:

Lead

• "retired" rather than "former" as with Damon Hill and Michael Schumacher
  • Corrected. Z105space (Talk to me!) 10:53, 2 November 2014 (UTC)
• there are 0 refs in the lead/infobox
  • I have also corrected this issue. Z105space (Talk to me!) 10:53, 2 November 2014 (UTC)
• "where he secured success by winning three races over a period of three seasons." is 1 win a year a success for such a two-time F1 world champion?
  • I meant to write briefly in the lead about his career in the Deutsche Tourenwagen Masters (DTM) series and I have since taken in your feedback. Z105space (Talk to me!) 10:53, 2 November 2014 (UTC)

Early Life and Career

• a fan page is not a reliable ref, especially for a biography

Team Lotus (1991-1992)

• a fan page is not a reliable ref, especially for a biography
  • Both sources have been replaced. Z105space (Talk to me!) 10:53, 2 November 2014 (UTC)

Bogger (talk) 07:52, 2 November 2014 (UTC) (Currently seeking review of New Zealand national team nomenclature based on the "All Blacks")