Wikipedia:Peer review/Michael Woodruff/archive1

Michael Woodruff edit

I'm hoping to bring this article up to featured article status. I know it still needs some copy-editing and I'd appreciate any feedback there. Also, while I think I've covered most of the facts, I'd like suggestions about anything that you feel has been left out. Really though, any kind of comments about anything would be greatly appreciated. Thanks! Cool3 01:12, 6 May 2006 (UTC)[reply]

A few points, which should be reasonably straightforward to deal with:

If you intend taking this article to FAC, you will need to use inline citations (see m:Cite).
A lot of the sections are short and read choppily. Merge the subsections to alleviate this (e.g. World War II should all be one section).
The Legacy section describes events which happened in his lifetime, which seems odd.
When did he retire, and is there any record of anything he did subsequently? What was the cause of his death?
Woodruff published The Transplantation of Tissues and Organs, a comprehensive survey of transplant biology, and only one of the many books he wrote. If known, stating the total number of books he wrote would be useful.

Hope this helps. Oldelpaso 09:46, 6 May 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for your input Oldelpaso! Woodruff retired in 1976 (which I stated in the beginning of the Edinburgh section). I suppose I should move that to a more logical place at the end of that section. You're right about the WW2 sub-sections, they should be combined. As for the Legacy section, I tried to group together his most important recognitions, perhaps I should rename it Importance or merge those in (More input requested here from any one possible, merge into article or rename?). I'll add more on his post-retirement and try to find out why he died and how many books he published. Again, thank you very much. Cool3 13:00, 6 May 2006 (UTC)[reply]

I'm having trouble finding a book count for Woodruff. Amazon.com lists seven of his books for sale, perhaps I could say that he published at least seven, any suggestions? Cool3 13:32, 6 May 2006 (UTC)[reply]

I found this bibliography (pdf) which looks comprehensive and lists seven books. I've made a change accordingly. Oldelpaso 13:50, 6 May 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Thank You! Cool3 13:59, 6 May 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Does anyone else have input? It would be greatly appreciated! Cool3 20:50, 9 May 2006 (UTC)[reply]

A few suggestions:

The lead could be a little bit longer, ideally it should be a short version of the article.
Unless the sections are expanded on, I would get rid of the ===h3s=== in the early career section of the article, since at the moment they just serve to separate single paragraphs
An image would be good, both of him and what he did - there is a pic in the kidney transplant that you could use - accompanied by a very basic outline of the procedure. Mabye an image of one of the universities he worked at would also be good - I can probably get one of the Dunedin med school if you'd like it.
Is there anything named after him that could be included in the importance section?
Do include a list of his books (not papers - they get too long) if you can piece on together.

--Peta 11:05, 11 May 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for the input!! I'll try to expand the lead section and short subsections (or look into combining them). As for images, a picture of the Dunedin med school would be fabulous. I'm working on getting an image of Woodruff and have a couple of possiblities in the works. I'll put in a book list, no problem and see if anything was named for him (I can't think of anything off hand). Thanks again! Cool3 22:27, 11 May 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Response from a medical viewpoint edit

Very well done, nice referencing, well-written! One of the things that I find difficult in medical articles is remembering to explain things which the reader might not be familiar with. In this case, some brief explanation of some of the medical terms like in utero is probably warranted. Although the immunologic work is deemed important, kidney transplantation is probably one of the few medical concepts in the article that the lay reader is instantly knowledgeable about. There doesn't have to be great detail, but some explanation of what rejection, tolerance, immunosuppression, etc. are and why understanding them is important to his surgical goal of transplantation would be nice! Also, any description that you have as to why a twin donor was chosen first would help shed light on an interesting topic (ie less rejection with shared genetics). Great job! InvictaHOG 00:17, 10 May 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you very much for your input! I've tried to briefly explain the more important medical terminology in the article without excessive detail, trying to provide the minimum necessary for comprehension as a reader can click on the links to find out more about any of the topics mentioned. I may have erred on the side of providing too little information, what do you think? Again thanks! Cool3 13:47, 10 May 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Great article. A photo of the man would be nice for the lead section. --WS 19:45, 12 May 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for your input Wouterstomp! I'm working on getting a photo. If any one else has access to one or sees one that we could probably get under Fair Use that would be greatly appreciated. Thanks! Cool3 20:00, 12 May 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks Everyone edit

To every one who participated, thank you very much. I feel that this peer review has been a real success and I have now decided to nominate the article for featured article status. Cool3 16:25, 13 May 2006 (UTC)[reply]