The article has been passed as a Good Article. I would appreciate comments as to how to improve it further.--A Y Arktos\talk 00:13, 21 June 2006 (UTC)[reply]
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Please expand the lead to conform with guidelines at WP:LEAD. The article should have an appropriate number of paragraphs as is shown on WP:LEAD, and should adequately summarize the article.
Although the lead has only one para, I think it is adequate for the article, covering the scope of the issues.--A Y Arktos\talk 00:27, 21 June 2006 (UTC)[reply]
Per WP:CONTEXT and WP:MOSDATE, months and days of the week generally should not be linked. Years, decades, and centuries can be linked if they provide context for the article.
See if possible if there is a free use image that can go on the top right corner of this article.
There is a picture on http://www.eniar.org/news/murdoch2.html but it dates from 1972 and is definitely not public domain. There is also some sensitivity about pictures of Indigenous Australians, although as far as I know that is only when they are deceased. Stuart is still alive. I haven't found any appropriate free use pictures. The article is illustrated further down but these are not suitable for the lead.--A Y Arktos\talk 00:27, 21 June 2006 (UTC)[reply]
I don't think Template:Infobox Biography is appropriate - no image and he hasn't died, all relevant info in lead.--A Y Arktos\talk 00:29, 21 June 2006 (UTC)[reply]
Per WP:MOSNUM, there should be a non-breaking space - between a number and the unit of measurement. For example, instead of 18mm, use 18 mm, which when you are editing the page, should look like: 18 mm.
fixed one instance, didn't find any others--A Y Arktos\talk 00:47, 21 June 2006 (UTC)[reply]
As per WP:MOSDATE, dates shouldn't use th; for example, instead of using January 30th was a great day, use January 30 was a great day.
Per WP:MOS#Headings, headings generally do not start with the word "The". For example, ==The Biography== would be changed to ==Biography==.
I think the definite article is warranted in the sub-heading The Stuart Case, but happy to take feedback.--A Y Arktos\talk 00:32, 21 June 2006 (UTC)[reply]
There are a few occurrences of weasel words in this article- please observe WP:AWT. Certain phrases should specify exactly who supports, considers, believes, etc., such a view. For example,
it has been
allege
might be weasel words, and should be provided with proper citations (if they already do, please strike this comment).
It has been has a cite against it. The use of the word alleged is also justified I believe in the context altough no specific cite uses that form of words. Suggestions as to how to rephrase would be useful--A Y Arktos\talk 00:56, 21 June 2006 (UTC)[reply]
Thank you - the suggestions were helpful--A Y Arktos\talk 01:20, 21 June 2006 (UTC)[reply]
As Andy suggests, it can be improved by removing excessive links to solitary years. A monobook tool allows this to be done with one click on a 'dates' tab in edit mode. You can then accept or reject the changes offered and/or do more editing before pressing 'Save'. Simply copy the entire contents of User:Bobblewik/monobook.js to your own monobook. Then follow the instructions in your monobook to clear the cache (i.e. press Ctrl-Shift-R in Firefox, or Ctrl-F5 in IE) before it will work. bobblewik 17:44, 21 June 2006 (UTC)[reply]
