Mandera Prison edit
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I've listed this article for peer review because I finally feel confident in the page after nearly a month of gradually improving it from when I originally published, and would like to see what else needs to be added/fixed/changed. The article is GA status now, but I would love to see it become a Featured Article, so any and all feedback is welcome 🙂 Thanks! Johnson524 (Talk!) 07:50, 19 February 2023 (UTC)
Notes from skyvine edit
Hi Johnson524, I just have a one quick note, below. I also made a few minor edits that I was confident in, feel free to let me know if I made a mistake in any of them!
In the sentence "This was not always the case though, as findings from a survey taken between 1948 and 1950 showed the juvenile population in the prison and the nation as a whole decreasing", is the end saying that there were fewer juveniles in the nation overall, or that there there were fewer juveniles in prisons across the nation overall? I suspect it means the latter but when I initially read it it sounded like the former, and I'm not very confident in my interpretation. Assuming that it means fewer in prisons only, not in total, I think something along the lines of "the juvenile population in Mandera in particular, and the national prison system overall, was decreasing" would be clearer. skyvine 🏳️⚧️ (talk) 18:13, 21 March 2023 (UTC)
- Hello @Skyvine, and thank you so much for your reply! Your edits look great, and I've gone ahead and implemented the one you discussed above. Cheers! Johnson524 (Talk!) 03:20, 22 March 2023 (UTC)
@Johnson524: It has been over a month since the last comment on this PR. Can this be closed, or do you want additional comments? Z1720 (talk) 17:17, 29 April 2023 (UTC)
- @Z1720: Yes, please close it. Johnson524 (Talk!) 20:00, 29 April 2023 (UTC)