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Lupin III edit

Since the creation of the page, it has been improved very much. A large amount of information has been added and the page went through several phases of improvement. It would be nice if someone went through it and checked to see what else needs to be done :) thank you kindly! AutoGyro 09:57, 24 June 2007 (UTC) AutoGyro[reply]

You don't really have a plot or setup section in the article (which should go before characters), just something to say that the story is serial, and it usually involves Lupin and Jigen finding a mark, Fujiko muscling in on it, and sometimes Goemon comes in to save Lupin and Jigen. "Recurring themes" *needs* inline, reliable, citations. Beyond that, here's some automated suggestions to think about:
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  • Please expand the lead to conform with guidelines at Wikipedia:Lead. The article should have an appropriate number of paragraphs as is shown on WP:LEAD, and should adequately summarize the article.[?]
  • Per Wikipedia:Context and Wikipedia:Manual of Style (dates), months and days of the week generally should not be linked. Years, decades, and centuries can be linked if they provide context for the article.[?]
  • See if possible if there is a free use image that can go on the top right corner of this article.[?]
  • Per Wikipedia:Context and Wikipedia:Build the web, years with full dates should be linked; for example, link January 15, 2006.[?]
  • As per Wikipedia:Manual of Style (dates), dates shouldn't use th; for example, instead of using January 30th was a great day, use January 30 was a great day.[?]
  • As per Wikipedia:Manual of Style (headings), please do not link words in headings.[?]
  • Per WP:WIAFA, this article's table of contents (ToC) may be too long- consider shrinking it down by merging short sections or using a proper system of daughter pages as per Wikipedia:Summary style.[?]
  • Watch for redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's redundancy exercises.)
    • While additive terms like “also”, “in addition”, “additionally”, “moreover”, and “furthermore” may sometimes be useful, overusing them when they aren't necessary can instead detract from the brilliancy of the article. This article has 22 additive terms, a bit too much.
    • Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “All pigs are pink, so we thought of a number of ways to turn them green.”
  • Avoid using contractions like (outside of quotations): didn't, doesn't.
  • As done in WP:FOOTNOTE, footnotes usually are located right after a punctuation mark (as recommended by the CMS, but not mandatory), such that there is no space in between. For example, the sun is larger than the moon [2]. is usually written as the sun is larger than the moon.[2][?]
  • Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that it exemplifies some of Wikipedia's best work. See also User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 1a.[?]

You may wish to browse through User:AndyZ/Suggestions for further ideas. Thanks, Malkinann 03:01, 25 June 2007 (UTC)[reply]

  • Each of the five images in the article is a non-free image, and thus needs a fair-use rationale on its image description page. (ESkog)(Talk) 17:27, 28 June 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Is that not covered by the "Non-free film screenshot" licensing template? --AutoGyro 17:50, 28 June 2007 (UTC)[reply]
No, it's not. According to the Wikipedia:Non-free content criteria policy, you need to have a detailed fair use rationale on each image page that, in addition to saying why the image is important, names the article that the image is fair use in. -Malkinann 22:14, 28 June 2007 (UTC)[reply]
  • I have spent a long time today fixing up the article and adding references. If someone wants to go through and see if anything else is needed, I would greatly appreciate it :) --AutoGyro 05:01, 30 June 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Something else you might want to think about is turning the lists in the movies, video games, and OVA sections into prose - lists are looked down upon at GA level. Stuff about the production of the films may be appropriate there. -Malkinann 05:24, 30 June 2007 (UTC)[reply]
  • Since the article is on the Lupin franchise rather than a manga or anime series, you might want to check out Sailor Moon as an example of an anime media franchise article... I'll come back later with a review.--Nohansen 11:39, 30 June 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Sailor Moon is much more compact, though. What were you thinking of doing with the split-off videogames page? You mention the musical in the lead, but I can't really find any further mention of it in the article? -Malkinann 00:38, 1 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]
  • Major edits for the overhaul of the Lupin III article have now been completed. If anyone wants to go through it again and give any further suggestions, it would be much appreciated. I hope everyone is pleased with the way the article has changed in the past few weeks. I think with a few more minor edits, the article will be ready for GA or FA nominations :)--AutoGyro 02:13, 3 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]
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