Wikipedia:Peer review/Liverpool F.C./archive2

Liverpool F.C. edit

Previous peer review can be found here

New peer review to take this article from a great state to a featured article status, as part of the article improvement drive for the Football Wikiproject. The Rambling Man 15:48, 9 April 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Its more or less ready for an FAC run. Occasional things from the previous peer review aren't completely ironed out, its worth going over the points that were raised there. A few minor additional things:

Calling the Liverpool Academy "highly commended" needs to be qualified in some way.
The paragraph which starts "In 1922 and 1923 Liverpool won their first back-to-back League titles" reads uneasily. The events mentioned could be linked up more smoothly, they seem shoehorned together.
The number of deaths at Hillsborough needs referencing, should be easy to find something to cite.

Oldelpaso 19:42, 17 April 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Well, I've re-written that para to some extent, it may be able to be improved further, though. ArtVandelay13 20:07, 17 April 2007 (UTC)[reply]