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I've listed this article for peer review because it does not have enough items to become featured, so I'd like to at least receive any suggestions that I can get to improve it as much as possible. Thanks! Gary King (talk) 05:05, 24 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]

The formatting, illustration, and citation are all very good. Prose is straightforward although not brilliant. Could there be more facts to be listed about these universities? For instance, the ages of all institutions and their graduate divisions. Perhaps sizes of faculty, student body, and campus land area? Durova^Charge! 05:54, 24 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]

I have copyedited it a bit further. I'll look around for some more information to add. Gary King (talk) 06:03, 24 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from Dabomb87 (talk · contribs)

~~and they are all under the responsibility~~
"Both the University of Manitoba and the University of Winnipeg are in Winnipeg, the capital and largest city in the province." I think it would sound better if it started Two of these universities, or something like that.
~~Spell out lesser-known abbreviations in the sources.~~ Dabomb87 (talk) 12:41, 24 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Done Gary King (talk) 16:37, 24 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Comments
http://http//www.edu.gov.mb.ca/ael/unicoll/universities.html (ref #7) is a deadlink.
Spell out abbreviations in the references.

–Juliancolton ^Tropical ^Cyclone 13:18, 24 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Done Gary King (talk) 16:37, 24 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Comment - same thing that I said with the other one, no prose problems but maybe write out Established and others versus one letter. I also feel that the lead could be expanded somehow, it is relatively short.S_RX 20:54, 24 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]
If it's written out it will be too long for a 1024x768 screen. Gary King (talk) 21:03, 24 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]