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List of Spanish football champions

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I've listed this article for peer review because I would like ideas on how to improve the list. The red links will disappear eventually when I get round to creating the articles. Thanks, NapHit (talk) 21:13, 13 December 2008 (UTC)

Peer Review by User:Darth Panda Following WP:WIAFL, which is what I assume you are going for.

• Prose.

• The sentences in the lead are mostly run-ons and/or incomplete.

• "The Spanish football champions are the winners of the highest league in Spanish football, namely La Liga, it is also referred to as the Primera División." -> "The Spanish football champions are the winners of La Liga, or the Primera División, the highest league in Spanish football."
• "The league was cancelled from 1936–37 to 1938–39 due to the Spanish Civil War." -> "The league was canceled between 1936 and 1939 due to the Spanish Civil War."
• "The league was first established in 1929, comprising of ten teams, at its peak the league contained 22 teams, this was during the 1995–96 season." -> "The league, first established in 1929, originally contained ten teams. At its peak during the 1995-96 season, it fielded twenty-two teams."
• "Of the ten clubs that founded the league only Real Madrid, Barcelona and Athletic Bilbao have not been relegated, since its inception in 1929."
• "No other club has won the title on more than nine occasions, with the most recent club outside of Real Madrid and Barcelona to win the league is Valencia in the 2003–04 season." -> Information seems extraneous.
• "Athletic Bilbao have won the Spanish version of The Double the most, winning the league and cup five times in their history." -> "Athletic Bilbao has won the Spanish version of The Double the most, having won the league and cup five times in its history."
• "No Spanish team has won The Treble, which includes winning the European Cup as well as the league and cup. although a number of clubs have come close." -> "No Spanish team has won The Treble, which includes the European Cup in addition to winning the league and the cup, although a number of clubs have come close."

• Lead.

• No issues.

• Comprehensiveness.

• Perhaps a note should be made about why there isn't any data for 1936-1939 in the graph itself (in addition to in the lead)?

• Structure.

• Placement of key is a bit odd.
• For the "Total Titles Won" section, it might be good to give the place of each team (i.e. another column with 1st, 2nd, etc.)

• Style.

• No issues.

• Visual Appeal.

• For your references, instead of using {{es icon}}, you can set the language as part of the {{cite web}} template.
• The image is just a bunch of trophies. I don't know if your average reader would be able to connect them with Spanish football, so I wonder if there exists a better picture of just one trophy so it shows the lettering?

• Stability.

• No issues.

Cheers, and best of luck! DARTH PANDA^duel 01:22, 26 December 2008 (UTC)