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L. Ron Hubbard edit

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I've listed this article for peer review because it was recently declined for Good Article status and our reviewer, at a loss for precise suggestions to improve the article, recommended peer review. We could use brainstorming for ways to improve the article.

Thanks, Feoffer (talk) 23:36, 5 September 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from Z1720 edit

Comments after a quick skim:

"They retrieved wiretap equipment, burglary tools and some 90,000 pages of incriminating documents." This, and the subsequent sentences, need citations Done
"Hubbard claimed to have been the youngest Eagle Scout in Boy Scouts history, but in fact the organization kept no records of the ages of Eagle Scouts." Needs a citation Done
"Prior to the episode, the story was almost completely unknown in mainstream culture." Needs a citation Done
"The film depicts a Navy washout with psychological issues who is unable to hold down steady employment after the war. Facing potential legal troubles, he flees California by stowing away on a ship captained by self-proclaimed nuclear physicist and philosopher Lancaster Dodd, leader of a movement called "The Cause"." Needs a citation Done
"The birth of Hubbard's second daughter Alexis Valerie, delivered by Winter on March 8, 1950, came in the middle of the preparations to launch Dianetics." Needs a citation Done
There are references that are just quotes, without any citation to where the quote came from. I suggest removing these quotes and citing the source instead. The reader can look up the information later if they want. Done Quotes now properly formatted with explicit sourcing

I'm not a fan of block quotes in articles, as I feel that the information should be summarised for the leader instead. Consider if they are truly needed for the article or if they can be removed.
Page size is a little bit of a problem. At 158,000 bytes its over the recommended length at WP:SIZERULE. I would take another readthrough of the article and remove any information that is not directly related to Hubbard or not the most important.

That's all I have for now. I hope this helps. Z1720 (talk) 20:13, 16 September 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Hi Z1720, thanks for the feedback, I'll get on it. What tool did you use to calculate page size? The Wikipedia:Prosesize gadget reports: Prose size (text only): 58 kB (9328 words) "readable prose size". Feoffer (talk) 23:15, 16 September 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Alright, I've addressed the specific critiques. Per above, I'm not sure that page size is actually a problem. Feoffer (talk) 02:16, 19 September 2023 (UTC)[reply]