Wikipedia:Peer review/Komodo Dragon/archive1

Komodo Dragon edit

I've pretty much exhausted my public library searching for sources. I cross-checked it with other animal-related FA's. It was comparable to or better than much of the older ones, but it was slightly inferior to the newer ones. I'd really like to know if there's a way I need to expand, if there's any funky wording, if I need to find more citations, and if I should add more images (there's a lot in the Commons I haven't used). There was a previous peer review in February here, although this was when it was "Komodo dragon" instead of the current full capitalization. bibliomaniac 1 5 00:54, 12 April 2007 (UTC

'Komodo Dragons eat by tearing large chunks of flesh while holding their food down with their forelegs then swallowing it whole' - can this be clarified. Having ripped off the chunks of flesh do they then swallow the rest of the animal whole? or only the chunks?
What is the name of the 'organ on the roof of the mouth'?
~~To who is the mucus malodorous? Humans or Komodo Dragons?~~

I haven't got very far through the article yet. JMiall 17:32, 12 April 2007 (UTC)[reply]

The::*'more or less defenseless'. Are they actually defenceless? if they do have defences what are they? how large is a newly hatched dragon?
'the population at Padar was almost decimated because of a wildfire' - what is almost decimated? Decimate is not a good word to use anyway as it means 1/10 killed but people use it to mean a larger proportion killed.
~~'One particularly interesting fact...' - this could certainly be chopped.~~
~~'a more or less familiar keeper' - this would be clearer if it just said 'a less familiar keeper' which is what I assume is meant~~
~~what is a 'tow statue'?~~ JMiall 22:20, 12 April 2007 (UTC)[reply]

I've addressed most of the concerns that you've brought up. The only thing I didn't change was the organ on the roof of the mouth. I believe that it is a Jacobson's organ, but my source didn't specify. bibliomaniac 1 5 22:30, 12 April 2007 (UTC)[reply]

This site seems to describe the process. But is the 'tasting' going on on the roof of the mouth in the organ, or on the pads on the floor of the mouth? JMiall 22:45, 12 April 2007 (UTC)[reply]

I recall that the original diet of the Komodo dragon might have included the dwarf elephants that lived in Flores - it might be worth mentioning. I'll try and dig up a ref on that over the weekend. I'll also see if I can't find some journal refs to drop around the place, they always make things easier. Web of Science lists 23. That should help some. Sabine's Sunbird talk 06:04, 13 April 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Found it! And added and cited it. I'll look some more later. Sabine's Sunbird talk 06:21, 13 April 2007 (UTC)[reply]