Jennifer Aniston edit
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I've listed this article for peer review because I think with a little work it can be a GA and I wanted to know what needs to be improved before I nominate it. I've already worked on it a little bit but I am aware this isn't enough for GA. Any help welcome and appreciated.
Thanks, ArturSik (talk) 18:56, 5 November 2018 (UTC)
- Just one line under the subsection related to politics seems out of place. Single lines for paragraphs under "Health and fitness" looks choppy.
- This is just a suggestion. How about adding one quote box, in the same way there is a quote box in the featured article Shah Rukh Khan.
- Under the section "Early life" see... was an Arbëreshë immigrant.[4][5] and her mother's other ... this needs to be sorted, the fullstop. Convert to "," or something etc. Even in other places, the way sentences are framed here and there could be improved for flow. This example from the lead "Divorced from actor Brad Pitt, to whom she was married for five years, Aniston is separated from actor Justin Theroux, whom she married in 2015." Now this sentence is framed ok, but when placed in the paragraph it doesn't go with the flow. I hope I am conveying my point.
- The third paragraph in the lead needs working on. (partly conveyed above). The first two sentences and last three don't go well together. They are talking about totally different categories - one personal life and the other fame.
- Maybe this picture can be inserted from Commons titled - "Madame Tussauds Orlando - Jennifer Aniston"(Is it the wax statue or is it the real Aniston :D ?) This is just an observation related to the other photographs... I wish there were more photographs of her with other co-stars or maybe accepting a prize or with fans etc. That would give depth to the article. Also no pictures with former husbands. Nevermind.
- Regards DiplomatTesterMan (talk) 17:32, 13 December 2018 (UTC)
- DiplomatTesterMan Hi, sorry for taking so long to reply. I think I addressed all your comments to some extent. I will request a CE from the Guild of Copy Editors and hopefully they will be able to do more work on grammar, flow etc. If you have any other suggestions please let me know. Best. ArturSik (talk) 23:00, 17 December 2018 (UTC)