Wikipedia:Peer review/James Inglis Hamilton/archive1

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I've listed this article for peer review because I would like for this article to become a GA. I have expanded it from a stub to what I believe is a C-class article. I know that it is short, but I have had trouble finding a lot of information about the guy. I appreciate any comments!

Thanks, Michael Jester (talk) 18:15, 16 September 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Thoughts:

  • I could see this getting to B grade very shortly.
  • "command multiple Regiments " - "commanded"
Fixed
  • "Lankarshire" - Lancashire?
Fixed
  • "various renovations towards Murdostounm" - "to Murdostounm"?
Fixed
Added picture
Added picture
  • Check the capitalisation in places - "Great Uncle"
Fixed
  • I'd be disinclined to quote the tombstone myself - it didn't add much for me.
Okay. I removed it.
  • In the references, if a book doesn't have an ISBN number, consider giving it an OCLC number instead. The format is OCLC xxx, and you can look them up on line here.
I added them.
Hchc2009 (talk) 08:46, 18 September 2011 (UTC)[reply]

I appreciate the comments! What else do you think I would have to do to this article in order to bring it up to B-class?
Michael Jester (talk) 15:10, 18 September 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Comments HJ Mitchell | Penny for your thoughts?

  • Title: it's generally better to disambiguate by reason for notability than by middle name, so I would suggest it should be moved to James Hamilton (British Army officer).
    • If I moved to James Hamilton (British Army officer), would the peer review still be accessible?
      • It would need to be moved to match the new title, but that's easy enough.
  • The end of the lead is a bit choppy, though given that the article's not very long, there might not be much we can do about that
    • I agree. Possibly, I could add a bit more. I'll try to.
  • Perhaps a stupid question, but what makes "Inglis.uk.com" a reliable source?
    • Im not entirely sure if it is or if it isnt. It's ran by one of his family members so I thought it was reliable. If it isn't, I will try to find a replacement.
      • It's probably acceptable in the article as it is, but I very much doubt you'd get the article through GAN or FAC with it there (unless it's only being used for a fairly trivial fact).
  • It's probably too short to get much further than B-class. It's unfortunate, because there probably isn't a whole lot written about him, but it would be nice to know what kind of participation he had in these various conflicts, something about his personality, and all the other little bits that make up a biography. If there is anything else available, it would be great if it could be added. I did look in Credo, but there's nothing on him (though his son has an impressive entry in Who Was Who at Waterloo, which I'll gladly email you if you want). HJ Mitchell | Penny for your thoughts? 00:31, 20 September 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you for your comments, HJ Mitchell!—
Michael Jester (talk) 01:20, 20 September 2011 (UTC)[reply]