Wikipedia:Peer review/J. K. Rowling/archive1

JK Rowling edit

What can be done to get this to FAC? LizzieHarrison 17:26, 23 September 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Apologies that I don't have time for a full review. This article is well on its way, so my congratulations to the editors who have been working on it. My first suggestion, though, would be to start combining short paragraphs. Single or two sentence paragraphs make the prose choppy. Her early life section originally looked like a list without bullets to me! There's also a reference to a 2001 BBC interview about her heated flat in Edinburgh - is there a source here you can cite? Speaking of sources, at some point a heavy consideration should be put into the sources that are referenced throughout to make sure they are credible (I can see someone questioning the about.com link). That's all I have for now... It certainly looks like a good article and may be worth a Featured Article review - even if it doesn't pass, the close scrutiny will certainly lead to some advice on how to improve. Best of luck! --Midnightdreary 01:24, 7 October 2007 (UTC)[reply]