Wikipedia:Peer review/Indigo children/archive1

Indigo children

I reviewed this article a couple days ago as start-class, however, it is extremely well-referenced and I feel is very well balanced for an article on a pseudoscientific topic. I feel it should be bumped up to at least B class, does anyone have any other suggestions to improve the article past what I noted at Talk:Indigo children/Comments? -Wooty Woot? contribs 21:28, 30 May 2007 (UTC)

User:SpecialWindler

Some pointers.

• The lead is right but should be put into one paragraph.
  • More information: WP:LEAD
• Needs Copyediting
  • See WP:COPYEDIT
• Who is "Lee Carroll and Jan Tober", they arn't wiki linked or mentioned about who they are (are the famous novelist or what). I think this need to be mentioned.
• Stubby sections like "Education" and "Commercialization"
• In the In Fiction section, what does the Indigo (film) have to do with this subject.
  • Again in the "In Fiction" section, you should not external link in it. Move the link to the bottom of the page
    • And in Commercialization section (twice)

Thats my quick review.

While the "Beliefs" and "Scientific and critical interpretations" are very well written, the article lacks depth, and should be expanded in other sections, and well cited. Although it's cited alright at the moment, there are parts which could be well cited more. This is a "Start" but in reality is a way off "B-Class", but it can get there.

SpecialWindler 12:51, 1 June 2007 (UTC)