Wikipedia:Peer review/Hollaback Girl/archive2

Hollaback Girl edit

I'm not trying to stack Peer Review with Gwen's voice, but I think that this article near featured states. It has also been through peer review before. I'd like suggestions on how to inprove it. Any comments? Miss Michelle | Talk to Michelle 22:47, 7 December 2005 (UTC)[reply]

A few points raised during FAC, rounds one and two, include the following:

no significant analysis of the actual music—at present, a reader can't even tell if the song has an instrumental bridge;

New music section, but brief as of now. Miss Michelle | Talk to Michelle

speculation not supported by sources, or at least writing that sounds like original research, e.g., the lyrics "that could seem to be directed at [Courtney] Love" and the Highlander reference;

Commented out pending further research. Miss Michelle | Talk to Michelle

The Highlander reference is probably speculation, and probably incorrect; if Gwen meant it as a nod she'd probably get the quote right, which is consistently "There can be only one," in the movie, not "There can only be one." If the material about Courtney Love (both her statement about Gwen and Gwen's more vague statement) can be properly referenced I think it would add to the article, though. - Dharmabum420 01:09, 14 December 2005 (UTC)[reply]

claims that the song is known for its use of a particular expletive, but doesn't provide a source;

Replaced with neutral statements giving the number of times the word is used. Miss Michelle | Talk to Michelle

generally clunky and non-compelling prose (passive voice where such is not necessary, etc.).

Some changes currently. Miss Michelle | Talk to Michelle

The first paragraph is clunky because every sentence except the first starts with "The". -- Mpt 13:35, 16 December 2005 (UTC)[reply]

Done. Miss Michelle | Talk to Michelle 22:52, 21 December 2005 (UTC)[reply]

The models to follow for the first point seem to be "Layla" and "A Hard Day's Night". It may be difficult to find source material of that caliber for this particular song; in fact, good sources might not exist on the Web. My own opinion (one I think others share) is that this is not an excuse to slack off and stop researching. The best articles incorporate material which the rest of the Internet could not provide. Anville 20:03, 8 December 2005 (UTC)[reply]

The article does not require another peer review! It is one of the best on Wikipedia! --Winnermario 22:44, 14 December 2005 (UTC)[reply]