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Grammy Award for Best Metal Performance

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I've listed this article for peer review because… I want to know how this list should be expanded, what should I write? And the tables?

Thanks, Cannibaloki 16:36, 2 December 2009 (UTC)

Brianboulton comments: What the article most lacks is a proper lead. Have you looked at featured lists of music awards (per WP:FL) to see the kind of information included in their leads?

• In this case, the lead should at least say who is responsible for the Grammy awards. No prior knowledge should be assumed.

• I expanded the text a bit, what do you think?--Cannibaloki 23:36, 16 December 2009 (UTC)

• The lead should also provide a brief commentary on the 20 years of the award; for example some of the information in your "Category facts" section should be textualised.

• I did, but I think it can be better.--Cannibaloki 23:36, 16 December 2009 (UTC)

• The sentence beginning "Years reflect the year in which..." should be a footnote linked to the tables rather than a sentence in the lead. The citation for this fact should be properly formatted, not left as a bare link.

• I think this sentence can be arranged as an introduction text to the tables (I had this idea after your comments).--Cannibaloki 23:36, 16 December 2009 (UTC)

• Has there been no press or magazine comments over the years, on these awards? These could provide useful sources for facts incorporated into the lead.

• I added a bit.--Cannibaloki 23:36, 16 December 2009 (UTC)

• The tables look neat, but there is some confusion with the sources. Your main source seems to suffer from a mix-up over years. For example, it repeats 2006 information in 2007, which casts doubt on its factual reliabilty. Since most of the information comes from this source, this is a potential problem.

• Can I use rockonthenet.com as a general source?--Cannibaloki 23:36, 16 December 2009 (UTC)

• I can't find what your source is for the 1989 data, where Jethro Tull is indicated as the winner.
• As to whether the information on the tables can be expanded, the only thing I can think of is to indicate the albums from which the award tracks are taken. Would that be useful information?

• Yes, I added ("track from?").--Cannibaloki 23:36, 16 December 2009 (UTC)

I hope the above is of some use to you. I am not able to watch my peer reviews at the moment, but if you want to raise anything with me, please call my talkpage. Brianboulton (talk) 00:35, 8 December 2009 (UTC)