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I've listed this article for peer review because I'd like to try to eventually make it into a GA.

Thanks, Kudu ^~I/O~ 22:34, 29 September 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from Nikkimaria

Hey Kudu, welcome. A few comments in reference to the GA criteria:

I didn't check this article for close paraphrasing or accurate representation of sources, but you should definitely consider doing so as a precaution before nominating for GA
I think the lead section could stand to be a bit longer. It tells us what he's best known for, which is great, but ideally it would serve as a brief summary of the entire article
I would recommend a thorough copy-editing of the article. Avoid using contractions, and try to vary the length and phrasing of sentences rather than having a lot in the form "He did this. He did that". You'll probably want to convert the article to use Canadian English, per WP:STRONGNAT. Check for appropriate grammar throughout - for example, "On December 5, Justice Denis Jacques sentences Nadeau-Dubois" should probably be in past tense. You could, if you like, ask the Guild to take a look.

Other than those points, this looks like a promising article. I don't know much about the individual so can't speak to whether any major details have been missed, but no gaps stand out. Nikkimaria (talk) 23:39, 29 September 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from Jojalozzo

This is a great start. I agree with everything that Nikki suggests. In addition, here are a couple of suggestions about the sources, most of which are in French.

I recommend you review WP:Verfiability#Non-English sources (if you haven't already done so) and do what you can to comply with those recommendations.
Try to find as many reliable English sources as you can and use them to supplement the non-English sources.
Where there is no English source, add an English translation quote of the relevant portion of the source.

As Nikki recommends, Recruit a copy editor to help you improve the flow and tighten the prose. Good work! Joja lozzo 02:49, 30 September 2013 (UTC)[reply]