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I've listed this article for peer review because it's nice but I don't know where to take it from here to make it GA-worthy.

Thanks, —Disavian (talk/contribs) 23:17, 6 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Finetooth comments: Clough is clearly an accomplished man; however, the article presents only the sketch of a fraction of a whole person. It presents a pretty good list of Clough's accomplishments, but it reads more like a vita than a biography. It might be hard to find more details in sources external to the university, but some must be available. Here are some questions that might lead to answers that would make the article more interesting and rounded:

Who were his parents? Can you add anything more about his early life?
Done. Disavian (talk) 18:30, 13 February 2012 (UTC)[reply]
How big is Douglas Georgia? Where is it in relation to Atlanta? Is that where Clough went to high school?
What made Clough choose Berkeley for his Ph.D. work?
Is he married? Does he have children?
Done. Disavian (talk) 18:30, 13 February 2012 (UTC)[reply]
What are his non-academic interests? Pets? Sports? Fishing? Travel? Photography?
I'm not sure how one would integrate that into an encyclopedic article. Disavian (talk) 20:54, 14 February 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Were any of Clough's decisions at Georgia Tech controversial? It would be highly unusual if this were not the case. Controversies often attract coverage by outside media, and those would be possible sources for information about Clough from a variety of points of view. Varied points of view seem to be largely missing from this article; virtually everything in the article is honorific. Even a wonderful university president is apt to ruffle a feather now and then over the course of 14 years. Who disagreed with him about one issue or another? What did they have to say?
I added the one controversy I knew about. I can't recall any others. Disavian (talk) 20:54, 14 February 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Did Clough have any setbacks at Georgia Tech or elsewhere, or did things just always flow smoothly?

Lead

  • "the Georgia Institute of Technology" - Since you use an abbreviated name later in the article to refer to this institute, it would be good to include it here, thus: the Georgia Institute of Technology (Georgia Tech).
  • "A graduate of Georgia Tech, in civil engineering, he was the first Georgia Tech alumnus to occupy that post." - Which post, Georgia Tech or Smithsonian?
  • "(the G. Wayne Clough Georgia Tech Promise Program)" - It might be more clear to specify that this describes the last program in the list rather than the whole list. Maybe "The latter was called the G. Wayne Clough Georgia Tech Promise Program".

President of Georgia Tech

  • "In 1998, he separated the Ivan Allen College of Management, Policy, and International Affairs into the Ivan Allen College of Liberal Arts and returned the College of Management to "College" status." - Why was that important?
    • Done. Elaborated on the importance of that a bit. Disavian (talk) 22:18, 10 February 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Secretary of the Smithsonian Institution

  • Who named him secretary? How was he chosen? What are the required qualifications? Were any others in the running; if so, who?

Honors and awards

  • "Dr. Clough... " - WP:CREDENTIAL advises against using academic titles before names and suggests descriptive phrases where necessary. No description is needed here since he is fully described much earlier in the article.

References

  • What makes the Geotechnical Engineering Hall of Fame a reliable source per WP:RS?
  • What makes ANAK a reliable source?

Other

  • The tools in the toolbox at the top of this review page show that some of the citation urls are dead and that the images need alt text, meant for readers who can't see the images. WP:ALT has details.

I hope these few suggestions prove helpful. Finetooth (talk) 03:22, 13 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you, these are excellent suggestions! :) —Disavian (talk/contribs) 03:51, 13 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]
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