Wikipedia:Peer review/Frederick Law Olmsted/archive1

Frederick Law Olmsted edit

I've listed this article for peer review because Olmsted is an important figure in urban planning, landscape architecture and other fields. I'd like to some outside opinions as to what I or someone else could do to improve this article.

Thanks,

-- John Reaves 09:54, 30 October 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Review by Chris.B edit

Nice, instresting article. Just some things:

There is either a glaring typo in the second sentence or I suffering from a severe bout of vision deficiency. "Other projects" I would say.
The article is obviously referenced, but still requires inline citations.
No need to link individual years like 1895.
There are a couple of stray citations in the "Academic campuses designed by Olmsted and sons" and "Other notable Olmsted commissions" that need formatting.
The popular culture section is basically trivia. It might be a good idea to remove it altogether or integrate it.
Book sources require page numbers.

That's about it. Hope that helps. -- Chris B • talk 17:20, 31 October 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks. -- John Reaves 18:33, 6 November 2007 (UTC)[reply]

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