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Exploration of Io edit

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This page was created last week as an expansion to the Io (moon)#Observational History section of the article on Jupiter's moon Io. Over the next few days, I expanded each section to provide comprehensive coverage and added sufficient citations. My goal is to submit this article as a Featured Article Candidate. I would like to ensure that this FAC goes pretty smoothly, so I get some of these fixes done now. In particular, this is the first large article of this type that I have worked on in more than a year, so obviously there maybe new parts of the MOS I am not aware of.

Thanks, Volcanopele (talk) 01:32, 22 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from Niagara

General

Alt-text is needed.
"sulfur dioxide" and "SO₂" are both used throughout the article; the first instance should have the abbrievation in parentheses (i.e. sulfur dioxide (SO₂))
I believe "Jovian" should always be capitalized (i.e. anti-Jovian). Correct me if I'm wrong, though.
The article is included in a hidden category Pages containing cite templates with deprecated parameters. This should probably taken care of before going to FAC.
Date ranges need En dashes, per WP:MOSDASH.

Intro

"The Exploration of Io, one of Jupiter's..." — "exploration" should be lower-case.
I'd explain what "5th magnitude" means, or at least link it. (I should also point out that I noticed that that sentence is an exact duplicate of another farther down the page; any chance one could be reworded so it doesn't sound stale).

Galileo era

Mention what a "safing event" is.

Interesting article...well written...shouldn't have too much of a problem at FAC. Hope this helps, if I spot anything else, I'll add it. Niagara ^{Don't give up the ship} 03:28, 1 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you for your review. In this last edit of the article, I think I have addressed all your comments. I have seen anti-jovian and anti-Jovian in the sources I've used for the article. I have no problem going with Jovian capitalized. Safing event is now described in the text (it is mentioned first in the table, but it might be better to leave such detailed discussion for the body of the text, while the table acts more of a summary for each flyby). --Volcanopele (talk) 01:58, 2 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]