Wikipedia:Peer review/Executive Order 9835/archive1

Executive Order 9835 edit

Looking for comments, and/or edits to brings this article up to GA status, I will probably submit it for that after this review so please help out as much as possible. Thanks A mcmurray 05:37, 2 February 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Comment:Those suggestions have been integrated into the article.A mcmurray 10:17, 6 February 2007 (UTC)[reply]
  • I'm a bit concerned that the article is somewhat one-sided as is, particularly that the background section is almost reflexively cynical about the motives of conservatives of the era. I've added the Moynihan quote, but more should be done in that respect in order to keep the article from reading like an argument. MisfitToys 21:38, 6 February 2007 (UTC)[reply]
    • Just saw your comment on the peer review page. Well I am all about levelling it out. I think in hindsight, historically speaking, that a lot of the Communist hysteria during that period was whipped up by a combination of factors from both sides of the aisle. I certainly don't want it to sound reflexively cynical. Any ideas and or contributions would be most excellent. And I will continue to research. I have found some additional info about some of the Supreme Court Cases surrounding the order, do you think I should include a sub section in the outcome section?A mcmurray 00:09, 9 February 2007 (UTC)[reply]
      • I'm simply saying that some of the phrasing suggests that conservatives were acting solely to gain an electoral advantage, and not out of any genuine concern; the article should treat their positions legitimately, and should include relevant quotes from them as well as from liberal figures such as Clifford. MisfitToys 00:26, 9 February 2007 (UTC)[reply]
I will be searching several journal databases at the library either tonight or tomorrow for more sources and viewpoints. This article could really use some more input if anyone has time. Thanks.A mcmurray 13:57, 19 February 2007 (UTC)[reply]